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In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?
这个题目
学生在主体部分某段落有一句话写道:
Because their parents do not have enough time, many teenagers cannot receive education from their parents.
这句话的升级空间还是很大的
教师调整后的句子如下:
Parents are too busy to teach their children.
或者
Good parenting is absent from the teenagers’ growth, and such absence is attributed to their parents’ busy schedules.
句子解析:
句式提升的关键在于:不用 “not” 否定, 而用 “too … to”
● “too + 形容词 + to” 意为太… 以至于不能 … 。这个简单的表达法学会的尽管很早,使用的恰当也可以使句式变得精简,同时避免过度使用 “not”的否定。
句式提升的关键在于:不用动词处否定,而是选用合适的形容词进行否定
● “absent” 这个形容词除了可以表达缺席,还可以表达一个东西的缺失。用在这里替换了原先的 “cannot receive education” 这个动词的否定; “absence” 这个名词也可以用于替换动词处的否定;
● “parenting” 这个名词意为教养,抚育;
● 用多了because, 要学会用 “be attributed to” ,意为归因于。使用时要注意原因和结论的位置(结论先出现,原因放在to后面)
★ 练习题 ★
【升级/修改如下句子】
Because there is no strict censorship, teenager are exposed to massive amount of violent information.