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应对 Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion. 这个题目 学生在主体部分第二段句写了下面这句话: Group sports help people develop their communication and teamwork skills at work. 是不是太稀松平常,而且你也差不多写成这样?心里也明白这个句子也不值什么分数? 看看教师修改后的句子: In a group sport, participants, those who are on the same team, need to communicate and work together. The sports field is therefore where their communication skills and teamwork spirit develop. ▲ 首先,多出了一个句子,其实也就是把原先的一句话拆分成两句话来说。句话说群体运动中参与者做什么,第二句再说从而收获什么。 ▲ 句其实除了同位语(“those who are on the same team”)现象,也没啥好说的了。确实是,但是大家可别忘记这个关键的语法现象是在英语中很常用的哈,同位语的“补充和解释”功能真的太重要了。 ▲ 第二句其实也是很简单的一个“主(The sports field)——系(is)——表(where their communication skills and teamwork spirit develop)”结构,同时有个“therefore”用来说明这一句与上一句之间的逻辑关系。但是,这个第二句的想法和说法可不简单:1)没有用participants作为主语,也没有用skills作为主语,这两个主语的选择都让句子太平常无聊了,所以用运动场,也就是事情发生的地方作为主语。你品。2)用疑问词 where 引导名词性成分,类似的现象还有 who / what 来引导名词性成分。倒不是这个语法现象难,而是大家会忽略。 ★ 小总结 ★ 看似简单的语法现象或者句型结构也可以作文写好。但是陈词滥调是式的措辞可不能,要抛弃。