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应对 The key to solving environmental problems is simple: present generations must have a less comfortable life for the sake of future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 这个题目 (2020年8月22日真题) 学生写的开头段落如下: (今天,我们分析的不仅仅是一个句子,而是一整个段落) Contemporary people, to preserve our environment for the next generation, have to abandon their comfortable lifestyle. I would disagree with this opinion, because coping with environmental pollution does not necessarily mean that the present generation must sacrifice their life. 教师修改后的段落,如下: It is argued that people, to preserve our environment for the next generation, have to abandon their comfortable lifestyle. I disagree with this opinion, because solving environmental problems, typically pollution, does not necessarily mean that the present generation must reduce their life quality. ▲ 首先,原来的句,是在表明本文作者的观点,而不是陈述别人的观点。但是,第二句又说到“不同意”这个观点,于是,两句冲突了。于是句需要加上 It is argued … 来说明这是别人的观点。 ▲ contemporary 这个词很多余。 ▲ 表明自己“不同意”的时候,不需要would。因为作者就是“不同意”,而不是“(如果怎么样的话就会)不同意”。would这个情态动词暗示了(如果怎么样的话就会),这个暗示并不成立,因为难道是“如果有别人有某种想法,作者就会不同意”么?显然不是,因为别人就是已经有题目中所说的想法,而不是如果有。 ▲ cope with 的意思是“应付/对付/应对/处理”,但是都不是“解决(掉,于是问题就没有了)”。 ▲ sacrifice 这个词的意思重了。“牺牲生活”感觉很可悲,应该不至于那么严重,而是“降低生活质量”,这个程度正常些。