Task 2

　　Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

　　To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　✔对于这种抽象话题，如何“接地气”是关键。

　　✔费玉清上个世纪的老歌《一剪梅》在国外社交平台爆火。这首歌的什么元素让不同种族，不同年龄的人如此上头呢？是歌词吗？是旋律吗？还是意境呢？

　　✔要结合身边热点时事，罗列观点。

　　✔不要通篇空洞的谈 “music”, 将其中包含的元素（lyrics, melody, mood, artistic conception，rhythms…）展开与cultures 和ages 相联系。避免文章无话可谈，无词可用。

　　Different languages are the key distinguisher （辨识手段） of people from various cultural background. →由语言推导到歌词Although the insightful（有意义的） lyrics of songs maybe incomprehensible （不可理解的） due to the language barrier, its melody is linguistically neutral. → 针对上一句的melody, language barrier 两个核心信息点展开Specifically, some features of melody can be used to covey emotions in songs, in a way that is universal across all languages. →进一步细化例证 For example, higher pitch, more fluctuations in rhythm, and faster tempo convey happiness, while the opposite conveys sadness. In this case, people from disparate cultures can （解决了段首的不能不理解歌词的问题，前后呼应）→comprehend the message embedded in the songs without understanding the meaning of the lyrics, and the cultural differences are therefore leveled （抹平）.

　　✔这个段落将music 中的重要元素melody提取出来，并将melody细化为pitch, fluctuations, tempo; 避免了段落空洞的写music, songs。主题词汇要掌握

　　✔要注意信息的前后对应和信息的逐步推进。

　　✔上世纪热门的中文歌曲，最近却火到了国外，并且受众变成了热爱social media 的年轻人。这不是一个很好的例子吗，因为它跨了种族，也跨了年龄层， 被不同年龄的。

　　段落间的衔接要有→ Just as it transcends (超越了) cultural boundaries, music can also smooth the generation disparity(鸿沟). Some argue that generation barriers in appreciating the music is unbridgeable （无法弥合的）due to the stereotypes about certain genres of music. →开始转折，使用包含少量信息的短句However, the barrier has been broken by musical activities. →开始对比 It is not surprising to see young individuals are fond of the nostalgic (怀旧的) feel of a song released years ago. Likewise, modern music genres such as hip-hop, rap and techno are also becoming increasingly popular among older demographic（特定年龄段的人口）. This is happening thanks to the increasing number of intergenerational musical activities. →不要忘了解释为什么With more music festivals to attend together and with more short music videos to share, ←with的独立主格the young and the old can exchange their interpretations about music. Providing common ground（共同的兴趣爱好） for people of different age demographics. ←分词前置做原因状语, music plays the role of ice breaker (打破僵局的活动), ←分词后置作伴随状语 alleviating generational barriers.

　　✔这一段围绕音乐的另一个要素，genre（流派） 展开。

　　✔同时将不同年龄的人与不同的流派联系；老年人爱新音乐，年轻人爱老音乐；音乐作为媒介，作为ice breaker

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