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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantages for the environment?
审题关键:对于个人的好处是否大于对于环境的坏处,而对于个人的坏处不在题目问题意义之内,行文过程中千万不要瞎延伸。
[害!还是那一招,故意做个悬念烘托审美落差,对吧?再学不会我都要写吐了] Thanks to the unprecedented progresses made in the motor industry, numerous households can now drive freely.[好的CC其实类似于语文修辞上的“顶针”,但是顶的词性不一样,注意到了么?] This freedom sounds alluring, but, unfortunately, behind such convenience is the truth that individuals gain less than they except while the nature suffers a lot. [利弊分析类别的高能句式你确定不死背下来?语法剖析:抽象意义上的方位倒装后挂名词性从句内含对比结构。读者在实操中切记注意对比主体是否存在可比性,笔者这里当然是okay的!最后,不要小看这个suffer,小词大用。]
[中心句一定要学会精简,信息留白] Car owners benefit from their car ownership. Immediately after a person purchases a car, traveling is not subject to the timetables, the routes of buses or trains, or the availability of taxis. Instead, people are able to travel whenever and however they please. In addition, sitting on the driver’s seat may be more comfortable than standing in a cramped and crowded compartment of a bus or train. [带动信息走向的必要处措辞技巧:alliteration] However, compared with the long-term well-being of mankind, the superficial convenience seems to be far overshadowed.
As a matter of fact, increasing numbers of private cars wreck great havoc on the environment. More precisely, cars are not friendly to the nature, making our cities and towns lesshabitable. To commence, cars emit pollutants, many of which are highly toxic. Meanwhile, the carbon emissions prove to be a major cause for the current unfavorable climate change across the globe. Cars also produce noises. Drivers inevitably use the horns, and the noise is persistent and irritating [只在必要处措辞,不要通篇“作”]. Even though the use of horns may be strictly prohibited in some zones in downtown areas, the car engine generates sounds that are similarly annoying. A noisy environment is certainly undesirable. In addition, the large traffic volume, even if the cars are in order, causesdispleasure and upsets people. Having so many cars lining up on the road, a city feels crowded and uncomfortable. [这一文段的措辞技巧值得读者学习:实意词无时无刻不凸显笔者的情感立场,回应TR]
To conclude, cars purchased in bulk and used frequently canbetter people’s lives to a limited degree. The benefits for individuals of the trend can hardly offset the harm to ourMother Nature. [措辞:idiomatic expressions是高分范文必不可少的]
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