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When people make decisions of buying something, many of them make their decisions based on what they see in advertisements.
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
这个题目。
学生写了下面这个句子:
You may find a better solution to an aged problem by watching advertisements.
*个问题,应该是很明显大家发现的:an aged problem?我明白意图,“老”问题又不想用old,但是用aged还不如用old了。。。
* 第二个问题:直呼读者“You”,不妥。
* 第三个问题:除非前后的句子搭建了语境(于是,比较关系中需要的两个主体明确了),不然,我们要避免中文口语习惯里的滥用比较级。不然,我们的读者其实并不知道究竟怎么得出的better,比什么better呢?
看下面
教师修改后的句子:
A viewer of advertisements may be inspired and come up with good ideas to solve a problem that has long been bothering.
*好像很难解释究竟好在哪里,但是读起来就顺畅许多,意思也明确。
* 尤其需要讲的是,回应原句中的an aged problem,其实是 a problem that has long been bothering。注意,long在此处是副词,放在have和done/been之间。
* 避免了by doing something这个僵硬的表达方式,而是用“广告观众”作主语。
小总结:
* 定语从句可以解决大家找不到合适的形容词的困扰。
* 主语的选择其实是句子构造的重要技巧(之一)。