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「审题」 构思这幅图时，笔者的初衷是循规蹈矩的代入一个“人”，利用这个人的行程路线来进行“移步换景”式的描写。后来“惊恐地”发现：两图比较下来变化之处无非仅有2-3处，那么不妨一把抓，人为地根据modifications来分组。 「Rephrasing」 The maps illustrate how the road access to a city hospital surrounded by Ring Road varied in 2010 on the basis of its 2007’slayout. 「Main Body 1」 <中心句=停车场的变化是最为明显的 (笼统概括为宜，否则下文不好进展)> In 2010, the addition of a bigger car park was mostconspicuous. → (分写：基于2007年的旧址，它的变化明显到了什么地步？) Instead of allowing the staff and the public to share the parking space in the east of Hospital Road, <仔细观察波浪线部分的前后指代其实是一致的，which引导的非限定从作插入语了>which was the case in 2007, the hospital established another new parking lot larger in size in the east of the city hospital building, and the public had access to the new one via Ring Road. → (观察要仔细一些，不要忘却信息点)At the same time, the previous parking lot became staff-only. 「Main Body 2」 <介绍新景观物出现的位置，可以尽量依赖一些较为稳定的先前的参照物> It is also notable that a rectangular bus station was established southwest of the city hospital building. à <依次介绍bus station附近的变化: 由大及小; 方位状语提前，句子使用完全倒装> On both northern and southern end of Hospital Road was one roundabout respectively, and both of the two roundabouts were connected to the bigger bus station. <一句话交代一下，这里的过去长啥样？> Simultaneously, the original six bus stops on both sides of Hospital Road weredemolished. 「Overview」 Overall, based on 2007’s site, the access differed enormously, and the 2010’s hospital became more accessible. Some people believe that university education should focus on academic studies only. Others hold university education should pay more attention to job skills. Discuss both views and give opinions. 「Introduction」 The unemployment rate surges, besetting graduates considerably. This can in part be attributed to the fact that university education focuses too much on academic studies. Personally, fostering undergraduates’ job-related skills should be the first imperative. 「Main Body - 1」 <先小让一步-认可教授academic studies有道理> Admittedly, it isjustifiable for university to attach importance to academic researches only. (为什么前面这个话是合理的？得适当解释一下吧) This is mainly because such educational mode can prepare thoseextraordinary students to be devoted to the research circle in the future, which lays a solid foundation for the development of national researches. Besides, it is through learning some academic subjects that the normal students can also polish the knowledgeand sharpen their wits. // <转折-夸得都快上天了就赶紧转回自己的写作立场，即：只教授academic studies会有很大的不足> However, to most students, these academic disciplines have little relevance to their practical lives, which means that hardly can they integrate theory with practice. It naturally follows that they may have hardships in job-seeking. Besides, most students of moderate academic level cannot graduate successfully since the difficulty of such disciplines is beyond description. 「Main Body - 2」 As a matter of fact, allowing more job-training lessons to be on the curriculum can effectively make up for the aforementioned flaws. More precisely, such action helps students better secure a job after graduation. <观点很简单很平实了对不对，那就填上举例论证的部分来充盈篇幅吧>→ A typical example is that having mastered the social and communication skills, a graduate can highly likely be a salesman in a trade corporation, thus being capable of supporting his or her own life. // <这个观点应该还是比较好想的，较为accessible的观点就在篇幅上三言两语完成即可，不做赘述> Moreover, companies can also be benefitted. This is because they can save expenditure which should have been spent on training new employees. In this sense, thanks to the preparatory job training in college, the whole society can have a more vigorous workforce. 「Conclusion」 In light of the above, there is no need for any further conclusion. Considering the greater good of offering job-related curricula, it is quite imperative for advanced education to prioritize thepragmatic job training. 更多雅思考试干货敬请关注新航道雅思考试频道
